Sunday, November 16, 2008

My daughter, the poet

The oasis,
most pleasant of places.
There are plants, food, and a tree there.
The camel wants to be there.
The oasis.

2 comments:

Steve said...

A famous poetry critic writes:

I like how she deconstructs the haiku form, smashing its legacy to pieces by introducing repetitious phrasing, perhaps an indication of self-reflexivity by the author.

The oasis shines. The camel thirsts. We feel the camel's desire. We know he is one hillock away from nirvana, yet we are unable to help him find it. However, the mere fact that the oasis is brought into play a second time lets us know that the camel will soon achieve personal hydration.

The camel will drink. The world will spin. The elephant (implied in the subtext) will take a bath.

Put simply...I like it.

Hoot said...

My thoughts exactly!

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